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An excerpt from Dearth

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rookie - member
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Sunsets are cool things. They are comfortingly non-threatening, they are poignantly evocative in their repetitive randomness, they are pretty to look at, they tell you exactly how small you are without scaring you and basically do a lot of other stuff that it’s pointless to try to put in words.

Sunsets ARE cool things.

Sunsets are also things that most people, even the RAWM, try to put in words at one time or another, in one way or another.

“Fire blob falls,” groaned one RAWM (which for the sake of simplicity we shall ingeniously name RAWM A) to another, (which we shall likewise christen RAWM B). “Pret-ty.”

“Like chopped head,” grated RAWM B. “And sky red and orange like bloody, gooey pus.”

“Clouds lit like smoke from forge of hell,” moaned RAWM A.

“Pret-ty.” RAWM B agreed. “We go kill now.”

novice - founder
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Intriguing and evocative and would like to see the larger piece. Not sure what RAWM stands for.

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Chris Mooney-Singh, Word Forward
rookie - member
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wow. A nice, sweet story with the use of ... (um... could I know what is RAWM? please?) <OK, I'll just take it as an extraterrestrial being with a human IQ of 2786.> Then again, the story has a unique twist, with a rather "peaceful" description of sunsets first, followed by a more mature-type ending (the kill part). Excellent. Very pleasing to the reader. Keep up the good work!

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Nicholas Quek (poetry,story and BIONICLE fanatic)
rookie - member
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Hey guys. This piece is an excerpt from Dearth, my first book. In it the RAWM are evil henchmen: Really Aged Wise Men who were transformed into Ravenous Axe-Wielding Monsters. :P

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