January 20, 2009 by chrismooneysingh
Come and mingle with the writers! Established in 2004, by Word
Forward, Writers Connect is a fortnightly discussion group for
published and budding fiction writers, poets, playwrights, script-
writers and essayists. The meeting is held on the 2nd and 4th Thursday
evenings of each month from 7pm to 9.15pm at the Counsel Room, first
floor, The Arts House @ The Old Parliament House. Members bring along
copies of a prose piece, poem, script, song or other work to share and
get feedback from fellow writers.
Schedule:
Informal time from 7pm.
7.30pm critique session begins.
Contact:chris@wordforward.org; 91011844.
If there are any clashes/public holidays or problems with these dates,
plse tell me.
Writers Connect 09 @ The Arts House
Date Venue Time
Jan 22 Council Room (CR) 7 pm - 9.15 pm
Feb 12 CR
Feb 26 CR
Mar 12 Earshot Cafe (EC)
Mar 26 EC
Apr 09 CR
Apr 23 Venue: TBC
May 14 CR
May 28 CR
Jun 11 CR
Jun 25 Venue: TBC
Jul 09 CR
Jul 23 EC
Aug 13 CR
Aug 27 CR
Sep 10 Venue TBC
Sep 24 CR
Oct 08 CR
Oct 22 EC
Nov 12 CR
Nov 26 CR
Dec 10 Venue TBC
September 1, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
No longer do the light of your being
Grace my lonely solo dreams
For the alcohol haze has darkened
All senses and emotions
And your face no longer tears my heart
The memories haunt no more
Consider going for more concrete language:
light, being, dreams, tears my hear, the memories -
although they represent real experience
they don't really bring it across the general reader.
We kinda have to take it all on trust
that the narrator has had a downer experience.
Show rather than tell.
I'm sorry to sound a negative note
but I feel you have important things to convey
and I would like to know more - especially through
the use of fresh concrete nouns and far less abstract ones.
This critique also stands for some of your other pieces.
My suggestion is do an 'abstractiondectomy'
on your poem - take out anything
that sniffs of abstraction or cliche
and rewrite with the bones of what is left standing.
Do remember, the reader is not (generally)
a psychic and can't see the real life
experience behind the over generalised metaphors.
Looking forward to seeing a rewrite soon. :-)
Warm regards
September 1, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
Hi Valerie,
good to hear you are back. Do drop by Writers Connect sometime. Watch for Facebook announcements. Meanwhile, feel free to post poems here. Do kindly read this in the forum guidelines. The object is to help build an community here. thank Chris.
http://writersconnect.lefora.com/2008/05/17/posting-guidelines/
July 23, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
Hi Valerie,
Good to see you here. And glad to here you will be returning to Spore in Sept.
Your poem makes it way as a deft performance piece with its rhetorical push. It will be good to hear it and others later in the year.
Indeed the case for the poet of peace is well stacked up against the social exceptations of political stances as well as the needs and demands of role-negating feminism.
Then again, without inner demons, the hounds of hell chasing our asses what drama is there to write about?
Cheers
July 20, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
Welcome to Writers Connect forum. This is a place where you can safely post your original work for community online feedback. To ensure a consistent flow of member activity we ask you to comment on any two threads as you post your own thread. Please also refrain from obsenity and offensive language as there is no bar on the age of those who access this forum.
June 7, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
thanks Nicholas and Bhasker,
I think I should write more in this style in the future.
May 17, 2008 by chrismooneysingh
Welcome to the Writers Connect forum.
1 Feel free to post in the general section or to advertise up and coming events.
2 For those wishing to receive feedback for their poems, stories and scripts, please help support the WC community by posting a minimum of 2 COMMENTS on other members' works BEFORE posting your own.
3 Please feel free to make constructive comments on others' work.
4 Kindly show respect to other members by avoiding 'flaming' discussions or personalised attacks. This is a writers' forum rather than a social networking site or blog.
